All right. Here we go.
Firstly, please add a play button. I left the room, and suddenly music starts playing and other sound effects begin to sound off.
Secondly, like zabutei said, I don't understand why they're fighting, what's going on, who the protagonist and antagonist is. So as far as I can tell, the story needs to be more clearly shown.
Thirdly, the facial expressions are the same the entire time. Even while the gray haired guy is getting kicked into a wall, he's still smiling. I did like the drawings though.
Fourthly, the animation seemed a bit slow. Being a fellow animator, I know how difficult it can be to make a fight scene look good with your characters arms and legs still attached (take madness for example, no arms, or legs) but either way, you're adding in the limbs, so you've gotta make it look good. Take a bit more time to make things look fantastic.
Fifthly (Yeah, I know), try changing camera angles more often. It'll keep the viewer more interested.
Sixthly, please add voices. I can't tell you how old school it is to have text at the bottom of the screen.
Lastly, I don't know how you did that fire thing when the chick was... firing up, but it was great! I'd appreciate it if you let me know how you did it!
So, I know that seemed like a pretty harsh critique but I think that you've got potential. Just spend a bit more time working on each episode and they could be great.
I'll try to answer or your comments. XD
1) ha ha yeah. sorry, I didnt even think of adding it. I just assumed people would just sit there til it finished loading. Will add it in the future episodes.
2)since I answered it to Zabutei, I'll just Copy+Paste it. "you aren't supposed to know for what and why these 2 factions are fighting for til Ep. 2 which is why Ep. 2 comes out til after ep.3 comes out. Makes sense? Its like I give you 2 episodes that are supposed to confuse you yet intrigue you into wanting to know whats going on. and then ep.2 will fill in the gap between 1 and 3 (obviously) and everything will make sense.?" I'll add some more. Kinda like a Tarantino movie where he tends to start in the middle of the story and then go back to the beginning and then the End.
3)I'll agree to this. I guess it was just lazy on my part but I honestly didn't even notice til I was far into it. But the white haired guy who is actually just a cameo from my other Flash story, is always smiling while fighting even when he is being punished. He's psycho like that.
4) This is part my fault and part my comps fault. This project, even though its short in length was the biggest file size I've ever done. Much of the flash is all frame by frame, Mainly the fight part where the girl(Nawa) and the white haired guy(Danny) are inside the room. The turn around frames where Danny dashes in with his scorpion claws took like 2 hours and its like 1 second of animation if that and then spin kick where Nawa kicks the wall took like 6 hours. Since Flash kept crashing. Part of this issue was because my comp is/was realllllly old. I was only working with 512mbs or Ram. Creating a frame would literally take 30 secs. Im not joking. Half way thru I upgraded ti 2gigs of Ram. So now I can work at a much faster rate. =D
(kinda went on a rant there. So I just was looking to cut corners here then there while working with my old ass comp)
5) This is where I have a biiiig problem. BGs and my biggest issue, I SUCK at them big time. Which is why I try to keep them as simple as possible. and less diff angles. But I have to get over that fear sooner or later. So I guess I will try and experiment.
6)Other people have told me this as well. 2 reasons why I didn't even look to this. 1. I have tried it before and it was such a nightmare. People dropping left and right for no reason. or agreeing and then never sending their lines. and 2. These characters are not my characters, They are/were created by members of Vinnies Forums, so I don't know how they sound or what their mannerism of speech is.
7) Very easy really, just a bunch of strokes and then putting a blur and glow filter on them.
Not harsh at all, all the complaints are understandable. And are useful for future episodes.
Thank your for watching and for the review
Well some of the stuff was good, some of it was boring, (can be expected from many diffrent artists) and I got a few chuckles.
I think the one by Middlfingerings went WAY too far. I had to laugh a bit at the shoulder fan thing, but then I just got grossed out...
I'll give it an eight because of the hard work that went into it.
Great animation and story telling, but seeing as I'm not
an eight year old, I'm gunna have to say it was kinda boring for me.
Although I did enjoy seeing the child faceplant after running down a
flight of stairs.
I'll give you a ten because of how well done it was.
Too smart is needed.
I was very overwhelmed by the large number of towers,
and I the very NOT quick tutorial I skipped through due to
a rather severe case of boredom that I contracted.
I was also sad not to hear any sound.
Although I can't really speak much, because I lost interest
half way through the first level.
Man, you're very unlucky that I didn't review this review while I was baked.
So as much as I enjoyed it, it really wasn't special or spectacular.
But I gotta give it points for making my eyes hurt and give me a headache.
Seven out of ten for that reason.
A very well done game, simple enough.
I lost interest after the fifth level though.
Eight out of ten for a job well done.
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